Thursday, 8 March 2018

The expert mastermind

The Expert MasterMind

Living in the deep , dark woods there lived a  tiny , cheeky, sneaky , little mouse. All animals have said that he is small and puny but even the gruffalo is afraid of his clever schemes. Unlike his minuscule , mini feet he has ears as big as satellites. Even though his body is microscopic he has a brain like no other. While some animals think that he is fast food he is actually a quick thinking genius. While he strolls through the woods his tail is like a snake sweeping the floor. It was his duty to avoid his doom. After scaring of all the predators now he is the scariest of them all. Now the pocket sized mouse rules the whole forest!
By Tareeq & Prianka

#1.W.A.L.T: use a range of interesting sentence starters.

#2. W.A.L.T: use language appropriate to the purpose.

Next time I need to use more similes and metaphors
BLURB: We are doing character descriptions. We are doing the Mouse from the story the Grufallo. We are writing these for younger children that have read the story we home you enjoy.


  1. when you highlight your adjectives you need to make it a little bit lighter

  2. Good job! I like how you used a range of different sentence starters. your vocabulary also described the mouse really well. next time make sure to have a lighter highlighter to highlight the words since it kind of attracts the eyes to the colours instead of the words.

  3. good job you used a lot of similes and metephors

  4. I liked how use said he had to avoid the doom and I also liked how you describe the mouse for example use said he was pocket sized.

  5. I like how you said the mouse is pocket sized

  6. I liked how you used all types of sentences in your writing